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TITLE: Demon Girl? | Previous Challenge Entry
By Carrie Sund
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Somehow there is a hint of jealousy in me and I can’t figure out why nor can I pray it away. A girl like me would never talk to a girl like her it just doesn’t look right I mean I am a good Christian. I don’t have tattoos or wear black lipstick like Sarah does, and I only listen to Christian music. I really want to know what this feeling is that is pulling me toward her when it seems to go against my beliefs
She seems so confidant and at ease around every person that speaks to her. This girl is so much better at winning people for Christ than I am, I just don’t understand this. Maybe she is a demon in disguise actually leading people away from God.
Okay, maybe I am going a little over board here with my imagination, I think I will just talk to her. What should I ask her? Well I had better just go say hello.
“Sarah, do you have a moment to talk with me?”
“Sure”
“Well…………I guess I just want to know, Oh never mind it won’t come out right anyway.”
“Let me guess you want to know if I am really a Christian?”
“I am embarrassed to say that but that was what I was thinking.”
“That’s okay a lot of people question the way I look, but Jesus has called me to minister to everyone. He has given me peace that I am doing his will for my life and that is all I need.”
“Thanks Sarah that was all I needed, and could you please pray for me.”
Well I guess that is it, that is what I am missing, the peace that only God can give. Thanks Lord I get it now.
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Everything was moving along quite well, but the ending seems a little too contrite. Try extending it out just a bit. Perhaps a longer conversation between the girls. The narrator seems to "get it" a little too fast.
But again, great concept. Good work.