The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 524 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
06/11/06
You brought out some interesting thoughts. I like this: "peace is the product of living and walking in the truth". How true! If you were to work on correcting some punctuation errors and sentence structure, it would read more fluidly and your thoughts would be more easily conveyed. I would keep on writing; it's obvious you have an understanding of "peace". Thanks for sharing! :)
06/12/06
Nicely done and has a good flow to it. One comment: you said "personal peace depends entirely on me" then go on to say that peace is a gift from Jesus. I think personal peace 'depends entirely upon my accepting it from Jesus.' But I do like this and see it as a devotional or insprirational article. Thanks for sharing :)