The Official Writing Challenge
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06/12/06
Nice devotional and inspiration from real life. I would only use less questions at the beginning and perhaps turn them into statements. Nicely done with good command of grammar.
06/13/06
Starting out in second person, then shifting to first changes the mood and style of the essay. It started out as a sermonette, then moved to a devotional. You have the right aim, just straighten the purpose a bit.