The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice devotional and inspiration from real life. I would only use less questions at the beginning and perhaps turn them into statements. Nicely done with good command of grammar.
Starting out in second person, then shifting to first changes the mood and style of the essay. It started out as a sermonette, then moved to a devotional. You have the right aim, just straighten the purpose a bit.