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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Personal Peace (06/01/06)

TITLE: The sons of Zeruiah
By Jason Sanders


"Hey Asa, wait up!" Their legs churning, Joab and Abishai ran up the hill after their brother. Though instructed by their father to keep an eye on the herd of family sheep, the brothers were busy "taking the fortress". The "fortress was at the summit of the large hill that was in the middle of the family's property. It was far enough from the barley fields where their father Suri was working at that Joab was sure that they would not be caught and punished. Asahel laughed as he easily outran his brothers and made it to the hilltop first.
Joab gritted his teeth and quickened his pace. While dodging enemy chariots, Joab used his "spear" to kill as many enemy soldiers as he could on his way to the top. Arriving just a hair before Abishai, he flopped down under the branches of the nearest olive tree. "Asa, you know that we are supposed to stay together. Mom would kill me if I let anything happen to you." His brother snapped back, "Joab you are not dad! You do not tell me what to do! You are just mad because I beat you!" Joab pounced. The brothers began to wrestle and pummel one another while Abishai looked on with amusement. Asahel fought fiercely, but was no match for his older brother. He was as tall as Joab, but much more slender. At twelve, Joab was starting to take on the build of an adult. His thick chest and broad shoulders hinted of the power contained in his frame. Only a couple had minutes had passed before Asa was crying. Joab snapped, "Shut up, you baby!" and with one final shove, he got up off of his brother and sat in the grass. "We are brothers and we have to stick together. I have heard dad telling the field workers to keep a look out. There have been farms raided in this area. Besides, if you do not stay with us, you could be eaten by a lion, bear, or maybe even a snake.” Asahel furrowed his brow. “ I have not seen any lions or bears around here.” Abishai then spoke up. “I saw a lion yesterday morning, when me and Joab was at the brook with the flock. We started to run, but he just drank some water and left. But I am sure he is probably very hungry by now. You had better stick with us.” Joab grinned. He knew that he could count on Abishai to stick with him. Asahel being the youngest, he was teased mercilessly by his two older brothers. Truth be told, all three brothers were fiercely protective of one another. Asahel had an independent streak that sometimes caused him and Joab to clash, but overall, the brothers got along fairly well. They continued to laugh and play as the “enemy soldiers” stood at watch over them, feet planted firmly in the ground, and the “iron chariots” chewed their cud while bleating contentedly to one another.

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Valerie Routhieaux06/09/06
The story shows a good picture of sibling rivalry. However I was confused by your last line and wonder how it fit with the rest of your story.
It is always good to spell check and read over your article first before submitting.
Dave Kissling06/10/06
Interesting take on the wild brothers so well known from the Old Testament, watching them play as boys. Very well done. A little spacing between paragraphs would make it easier to read, however.
Jean Krohn06/12/06
Very imaginative! Including the last sentence--although it could probably be clarified somewhat, I thought it "made" the story.