The Official Writing Challenge
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I like this piece very much! It is thoughtfully done, and written in a simple, right-between-the-eyes style. Excellent teaching.

Watch for changes of tense. The more consistent you can keep it, the stronger the writing.

I so appreciate your potent last line: "only the purpose will remain as a reminder of what we really stood for."
06/06/06
You might like to expand this into a wonderful devotional. I would suggest adding two specific examples (perhaps attending the funeral of someone you didn't know in life, so you can only guess about him from what others have to say, versus the funeral of one you knew personally, and can give details). That could add a punch that would make this quite memorable. God bless your writing for His glory!