The Official Writing Challenge
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It's so lovely to be able to look at little snippets of life through another's eyes. Thank you for this adorable story. It could be a little more vivid if the children's features were described and you brought out their personalities more.
05/26/06
I can SO relate to this, but our aren't able to play on their own like that -yet. I'm just thankful for those times I can take a bath without getting toys dropped on me head :)

Try to have more variations in your sentances:

"He and David fight so, though." and "I’m glad for this little break, though."

"It’s been especially difficult lately." and "Sarah has been so cranky lately."

A nice slice of life, and reminder that it does get better!
05/27/06
You have the creative heart for composing an endearing story. This expressed so well the exhaustion that comes with the territory---wanting to be everything we hope to be, but too human not to need that "refill" time. God bless you with all of His best!
This is so touching! I loved the mother's thoughts to herself. very well crafted, yet I felt like it jumped around in different tenses. But you did a very good job and captured joy very well.!