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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Joy (05/18/06)

TITLE: Joy and Mara
By Kaylee Blake
05/24/06


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Joy and Mara. Mara and Joy. Either way you say it, there was still not a more unlikely pair of friends…or names.

Joy had a hard time seeing the weeds she had volunteered to pull. Her long black bangs kept getting in the way. And she was also irritated by how the long chains attached to her pants kept snagging on the various plants in the flower bed. It seems they were attracted to the sparkling silver and reached out to touch it with their bony fingers, only to tangle it in their braches.

She stole a glance at a Mara who was whistling while she worked.

Still acting all cheerful-like. She folded her arms defiantly and huffed. Why do I let her talk me into these things? Rich soil was working its way under her fingernails, but the black nail polish made it hard to locate and dispose of the offensive dirt.

Mara looked up and smiled, as if to sense her friend’s question. “Mrs. Brackshaw will appreciate our help. She really loves to garden, but the knee replacement surgery she just had prevented her from coming out to tend her plants.”

“Oh, I know, I know,” Joy said. “I just wish dirt and worms and plants-achoo!-had never been invented!”

Mara smiled wryly, recognizing her friend’s sour mood. “Plants weren’t invented, Joy darling, they were created!”

“Don’t laugh at me!” Joy exclaimed, with just a hint of a smile playing about her pouty lips. “I just don’t know how you can be so happy to be doing someone else’s dirty work!”

With green eyes twinklin’, Mara explained, “I like to volunteer to help others because it makes me feel like I’m worth something. I feel a sense of satisfaction and pride in a job done well.”

“Yeah, well, it just makes me feel tired!” Joy through her gloves to the ground and jumped up. “I don’t understand how you can think this is fun!”

“Oh, hello girls!”

Joy nearly jumped out of her skin.

“Thank-you so much for doing this for me girls! You don’t know how much I appreciate it,” Mrs. Brackshaw exclaimed. “It looks gorgeous! I’ve brought you some lemonade and cookies. Really, thank-you, girls.”

As Joy looked into thankful, yet tired eyes, she felt a sense of shame at her selfishness. With a pricked conscience, a change of heart, and a genuine smile on her face, she picked up her spade and a flat of impatients. “Oh, no problem, Mrs. Brackshaw. We were glad to help you out!”

Now Joy knew how Mara felt.


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Shari Armstrong 05/26/06
A nice lesson, good characters and details (dirt under the black nail polish). I like how you didn't have Joy the happy one at the beginnging :) Good job!
SYLVIA KING05/26/06
I liked the fact the friend doing the right thing got her friend to do the right thing, a lot of times it is just the opposite. Gppd job.
Edy T Johnson 05/27/06
This is a delightful little story. It did seem to end too quickly. Joy's grumpiness seemed deep enough to require her to struggle longer to accept her assignment. Wrestling with a crabby attitude (I know from experience :) takes a couple (interesting, for your readers, too)rounds to knock out the gremlins! Otherwise very satisfactory writing. God bless you.
Jessica Schmit05/29/06
Great job! You have some real potential. I loved your descriptions. They flwoed so well and your dialogue was very smooth and realistic. I do agree that the ending came a little quickly. But very good job overall!
Amy Michelle Wiley 06/08/06
I love how you have Joy being bitter and Mara (which means bitter) being joyful. Hehehe.


   
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