The Official Writing Challenge
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I really liked you story, it held my attention all the way through. I was a little confused be the relationships and who was who. Read your entry out loud and you will have a better chance of picking up mistakes. There is alot of good stuff here...keep writing.
05/26/06
I like this article - it's a wonderful message. But I am also confused by who is whom. Clarify your characters a bit and you'll have an impressive piece. :)
05/27/06
Very cute take on the topic. The flow of your story was pretty good, and your dialogue was smooth and realistic. Double check your point of view (make sure you're always seeing the scene through the same character's head). PM me if you'd like further clarification.

Overall, this is a good story that just needs a bit of fine-tuning. Keep writing and honing!

01/06/07
Hi Martha. Sorry to contact you this way, but I wasn't sure if you had the PM service.

Martha, there is a problem with your entry in the "Cooking/Baking" challenge. It appears to be cut off in the opening paragraph. Could you please resubmit it?

Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)