The Official Writing Challenge
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05/25/06
I could picture the mother sitting looking at the album — it made me want to see the pictures that went with the thought. Sad ending which you could expand later, but you softened it with the picture of the mother reliving the joy as she went through the album. Blessings.
I can picture every scene. Very vivid. Nicely done. It's difficult to write about joy with such a tragedy.
Your work shows a lot of promise. Keep it up.
05/25/06
You painted a vivid picture, felt the joy and the pain. Great job!
05/27/06
This is a really good story. As I was reading it I felt trapped inside I just couldn't pull away from it. Sad ending, I felt like I wanted to cry myself.
Once again, Great story!
Great job on this. I could sense something sad coming,but I couldn't stop reading. You do a great job of giving snapshots of this woman's life. Very short and to the point, yet full of emotion and impact. Well done.
05/30/06
Oooh. As a mom this one cut my heart out. You hit me with the ending like a freight train! Good job tugging at the emotions. However, do try to make paragraph breaks for easier reading. Nicely penned.
How tragic an ending, how beautiful her little life. You did a great job.
You did an amazing job of vividly bringing Rosie to life. By the end of your story I was sobbing. Thanks so much for the beautiful portrayal of a mother's love for her child.