The Official Writing Challenge
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05/19/06
You have a creative take on the topic. It seems to end a bit abruptly (I was ready to read more!). Take care with the grammar: "the customer received their food" should be "his food" to match the singular subject. Your title also intrigued me. God bless your writing!
05/22/06
I guess I shouldn't have read this one hungry! Good job. I really liked the contrast between the candidate wanting to work vs. the one who just wanted the rewards of working. Watch the grammar and keep writing!
05/22/06
An additional suggestion: let your readers figure out the ending. Something like: Brenda smiled; she knew who she was going to hire. Keep up the good work!