The Official Writing Challenge
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05/18/06
There are lots of ways to preach sermons without being a preacher. But you have shown us a "double-edged sword" here, doing good things, but perhaps not all that God had in mind. Well done.
05/20/06
Your title is a grabber! Your entry is creatively and technically flawless and holds the reader's interest. I suspect you are not long for Beginners! God bless your work! [p.s. with his military retirement income, and his still-young years, Sam has a world wide open waiting for him. I'm sure a Bible school and mission board would be blessed with his presence!]
05/22/06
Well told, and surprised me with the ending ( I thought it would end with pure regret). Good work.
05/24/06
I agree, the title caught my eye. Try writing without so much affirmation - he said, she said etc. Example the opening dialog would have been better -
Ms. Talor had ten minutes of class to fill. “What do you what to be when you grow up, Sam?”
Overall, you have a strong message in narrative form.