The Official Writing Challenge
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Nicely done. Good work bringing out a father/husband's worse fear.

I like using the name Hope at the end. We came close to having that be the name of our second daughter.

I only have one complaint. The second half of the conversation with the doctor. He asks to ride on the elevator, I was expecting something more between them...maybe more of how a miracle it was? Something. It kind of left me hanging a bit.

Very good job overall.
05/12/06
This is really well done, and riveting. Only one thing, I was also expecting a conversation between the father & the doctor - perhaps a chance to witness. Other than that, I like this.
05/13/06
I'd echo the above comments. Very nice writing