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05/12/06
Lovely poem. I really liked the line "Cup me in the palm of your hand". I also liked the positive statements of faith at the end - so it wasn't just asking, but receiving too.
05/13/06
Simple, but deep. Great prayer. I loved this verse:
'I sent you my prayer
I sent you my raw honest prayer'
One or two little typos, but nothing major. Good stuff
You articulated your desires and feelings clearly. Good poem.
05/16/06
Lovely poem. I especially like the triplets and the positive declarations at the end. Nice flow.
05/16/06
So much emotion and honesty in so few words! You compress a life time of experience, taking us from anguish to acceptance with, in so few words. Well done.