The Official Writing Challenge
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05/13/06
Sweet poem with a great message. You have a good ear for rhyme and meter. Would have liked a little more.
Definitely short and sweet, I liked your choice of words. Well done.
Well done. The message, the rhyme, and the rhythm, were all good. It was way too short though.
05/16/06
This is excellent work and a lovely surprise to read at this level! Clear, precise and impassioned without being sentimental. No forced or over used rhymes consistent rhythm. Well done. A poem is as long as a poem need to be, unless it's a FW challenge entry. :-) rhyme unintentional.
05/16/06
Writing from the heart is a pleasure to read. Keep writing.
It is short and to the point. However, I was looking for a longer piece. The last line in the first grouping confused me. "Carers", did you meet careers? You have great rythmn in this piece. Keep writing!