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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Hope (05/04/06)

TITLE: STOP....to consider.....
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05/04/06


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Hit the wall and not the child
Take a deep breath, donít get riled
You were once an infant too
Carers thought the world of you

You grew up into your teens
Anger surfaced, violent scenes
Break the circle donít be tethered
Or you find the family severed

Rid the land of Child Abuse
Banish every false excuse
See them grow up in delight
Childhood valued. Get it right.


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Helen Paynter05/13/06
Sweet poem with a great message. You have a good ear for rhyme and meter. Would have liked a little more.
Brandi Roberts05/13/06
Definitely short and sweet, I liked your choice of words. Well done.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz05/13/06
Well done. The message, the rhyme, and the rhythm, were all good. It was way too short though.
Val Clark05/16/06
This is excellent work and a lovely surprise to read at this level! Clear, precise and impassioned without being sentimental. No forced or over used rhymes consistent rhythm. Well done. A poem is as long as a poem need to be, unless it's a FW challenge entry. :-) rhyme unintentional.
Rita Garcia05/16/06
Writing from the heart is a pleasure to read. Keep writing.
Patricia Charlton05/17/06
It is short and to the point. However, I was looking for a longer piece. The last line in the first grouping confused me. "Carers", did you meet careers? You have great rythmn in this piece. Keep writing!