The Official Writing Challenge
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05/09/06
This is quite good. I didn't figure it out until "the accident" line. Good suspense on that. IMHO, I'm not sure I would have included the ending part about the warriors. I think the story stands on its own and tells a powerful message of human love.
05/09/06
I thought I was reading in "Beginners." Did I slip into a different level? This is powerful writing, both creatively and technically. And, the O. Henry-type twist at the end caught me totally by surprise! This is going into my "favorites" and I will be "tracking" you, when your identity is revealed!