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Wow. A very sad story in the sense that her family has now lost her, but it's also a very hopeful and uplifting story at the same time.

Well done. I liked it.
Very good work. I like the title and how it incorporates well with the story.

My only suggestion would be to eliminate the last line. It feels out of place. Having Kayla's last lines be the last lines of the story would pack more of a punch, I think. Besides, it might leave the reader wondering if she lived or died.
A good article, a good testimony, a good thought. Well done and easy reading (tears included), flows well.
Congratulations on placing in the winners' circle! This is a gripping story (and, since you didn't definitely tell us she died, I take heart that since her parents are at the hospital, that she will make it out of ICU and to wholeness). Good job!
This was a powerful, gut-wrenching story, that showed a side of love that we often avoid. Thank you for bringing the readers back to a reality we try to ignore.