The Official Writing Challenge
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04/27/06
Very nice idea story. You kept my interest. I would suggest you watch how many adverbs you use but otherwise nice writing!
Creative story. I can relate to what this pastor goes through. Been there, done that, bought the T shirt, and wore a hole in it.
04/29/06
Comment: Very creative, and an intriguing read! I liked it.
Critique: Needs work on Capitalization, punctuation and the last line is lacking a word; also I'd suggest "rest" on the couch instead of sleep...as it doesn't make sense when the wife is cooking something for him; but all in all I think this is a "super" story.
Very creative and entertaining... and at the same presents a very real problem...help wanted. Amen and lots of it, please. Pastors really do have to have an inner strength that can only come from God to still love the likes of us.