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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)

TITLE: She Can't Get No...
By Gini Branch



“I’ll have a number three, and giantize it for me.”

“That’ll be a number three giantized. Anything else?”


“Please drive up to the first window.”

Amy put her H2 in gear and eased up to the first window. The exterior display showed the price. She squinted to read it more clearly. “No that’s not right.” she mumbled. “Been here a half dozen times and they always try to overcharge me.”

The mini window popped open and the attendant reached out to receive the purchase price. Amy shouted over the engine noise that the price was wrong. He nodded and closed the miniwindow.

Shortly, another attendant came to the window, looked at the monitor above the counter and shook his head. He left and the first attendant reopened the miniwindow and said that the price was correct. Did she want her order or not.

Disgusted, she said no and drove away. The first attendant turned to the second and asked, “Why do they always act that way?”

“They aren’t hungry enough.” the other said. “Maybe next time.”

“Next time? She’ll be back?”

“Yes, only next time she’ll order a number three regular.”

The next day Amy was in line as had been foretold. She drove up to the order station and ordered a number three regular. As before she drove to the first window, the attendant opened the miniwindow and reached for the purchase price posted on the exterior monitor. Amy handed him the price, the attendant called for the second attendant as before. He arrived, looked at the order and the price, shook his head and left. The first attendant returned the price and closed the window.

Totally confused and irritated, Amy drove away again.

The next morning she was again in line. This time she told the attendant she had no order but just wanted to speak to him. He told to drive up to the first window.

“I’ve tried the giantized, the regular, and now I don’t want anything from you except a moment of your time. What must I do to get what you offer?

The attendant called for the second attendant and together they looked at the monitor. He nodded and told her to drive to the second window. Amy did what they asked. The second window, a bit larger than the first, opened. A voice welcomed her to their establishment and gave her a gown. He instructed her to come inside wearing the gown and join them for the meal. Her place was set and they were expecting her.

Amazed and bewildered, she did as she was told. When she entered the hall, a cheer arose from those already there. “We’re so glad you are joining us.”

“What is this place?” she asked.

“The banquet hall.” they replied.

“Well, what was that stuff outside?”

“Oh that. That was religion in all sizes. Order what you want and it’s available to you for a price. This is the real meal.”

“OK.” She said still trying to grasp the situation. “Why is this free and the other so expensive?”

“The other you pay for. This is already paid for you.”

Although she was new in the hall, she understood what they said and joined in the cheer when another joined them at the table.

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Lynda Schultz 04/13/06
This has all kinds of potential. I got a little confused with all the windows and prices and all that, but once I caught the concept, I thought, "how clever!" Keep it up.
Edy T Johnson 04/13/06
I agree with the first comment. What an interesting example of thinking outside the box! Good job!
Shelley Snyder04/14/06
I, too, agree with the first comment. Great job thinking outside the box!
Virginia Gorg04/14/06
Agree with all the comments and add this - cute and well done - clever. Keep at it.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz04/19/06
Well done. This was and unusual concept and a breath of fresh air. I really enjoyed it.
Shannon Redmon04/20/06
I thought this was so great! A creative look at the final banquet hall! I loved it!
Diane Rowland04/24/06
I thoroughly enjoyed that story. It kept me interested, and bang what a wonderful pay off ending! What God has to give is better than what we try to buy! Great job!