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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)

TITLE: The Day I Died.
By Samuel Connelly
04/07/06


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The Day I Died.

All the havoc I have created and the strategies that I have so meticulously formed and implemented with the greatest of devastating care. All of those men and women who have served me under my flag and have died and been destroyed for false hope in me. The families that I have torn apart and the relationships I have ruined; the millions that have devoted themselves to me willingly or without any knowledge at all.

How has this happened to me? I have done things to defy the Living God, and have achieved and created an evil not surpassed by anyone living or dead, or undead. There is no man, woman, devil, angel, or God that has been able to do the things I have done. I am the greatest evil.

I have led generals, armies of millions, and peoples of all races and beliefs into the bowels of Hell. There is no evil thing that I have not either created or put into action with my own hands.

I have seduced Pastors, Christian husbands, many of the youth of the Church of the Living God, I have written the crippling gossip discussions of women’s fellowships all over the planet. I am the poet that has authored the speeches and sermons of the selfishly self-righteous ministers of the modern gospel of the final generations.

And yet…

It was that little truth though… that little piece of unchangeable evidence that I thought I could erase or bring to no value through my incredible works. Oh my kingdoms, my patrons of suicidal allegiance, all of them are far from me now. All passed away into the destruction that they paid for. All is meaningless now. It has all fallen. And because of what, it is because of that little truth I couldn’t get around.

Know as I stand here waiting in chains, all I can see is that one little truth. Those two verses that I ripped out of the first published Bible, yet was never able to keep out of it, lay crumbled in my hand, as I have tried to destroy it all these years.

All I can hear banging around violently in my mind is His voice speaking over and over again that truth “And they overcame him because of the blood of the Lamb, and because of the word of their testimony. And they did not love their soul until death. Therefore rejoice, O heavens, and those tabernacling in them. Woe to the inhabitants of the earth and in the sea! For the Devil came down to you, having great wrath, knowing that he has but a little time.” (Revelation 12:11,12 )

Now I am here, about to be called upon by the Great Judge of all creation, His creation. I can hear them yelling, beating their thrones like animals. The ground below me trembles, my knees are growing weak. I can not do this, I cannot face Him. I can not face them! Oh my… dare I even say “God”? I can’t do this. Please someone, anyone, I cannot face it now!

The massive solid gold double-doors standing between me and the stadium of Judges suddenly cracks open. My skin crawls with fear, if I had a heart it would have already pounded to the bursting. My blood is boiling. The roar of billions, send a burst of heated wind ripping through the cracked doors and blows me up off my feet and to the ground.

Then He speaks.

“Step forward deceiver; take your stand in the place of Judgment.”

Suddenly a great invisible hand folds in over my body like a mighty vice grip- gripping down on every part of me and then starts to drag me in through the huge double-doors.

As I am slowly dragged away I see that crumbled up verse on the ground behind me that I must have dropped when I was thrown to the ground. All I can focused on as I go to the place of Judgment is that piece of paper, and all I can make out is the words ‘…knowing that he has but a little time.’


And the massive solid gold double-doors slam close.


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Gini Branch04/13/06
Intense. Engaging. Nicely done.
Amy Michelle Wiley 04/16/06
Wow. This is powerful. Well done.
Jessica Schmit04/20/06
This was my personal favorite for last week's entries. I read them all, and although this entry isn't the best written, I believe it holds the most power and communicates the topic incredibly. A few things that let your story down were some grammer errors. I say "let down" because I truly believe that this is a gem. Also, your beginning sentances were unclear. You began with As..., yet you didn't conclude your sentances properly. I'm only being hard on you because you are NOT beginner material. You'll be in Advanced in the next few weeks. You have a very engaging writing style and I read this story over six times last week. It moved me. Actually, it moved me to tears. Oh, one more thing. I know you were going for shock effect with writing in the first person, but it makes a much more enjoyable read if you write and "show" not "tell." If you have nay questions regarding anything I wrote, please feel free to pm me. Once again, I loved this. You have so much talent.This is a story I wish I wrote. Great Job!
Jessica Schmit04/20/06
oh, I mean that you started with "All." I also re-read my comments on your story and please hear my praise for this story. IT"S AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!
Crista Darr04/20/06
Using first-person was a brilliant, creative choice. Great work, Sam. This is an intense, powerful, awesome piece of writing!
Jan Ackerson 06/27/06
Sam, look for this powerful piece of writing to appear in the Faith Writers Front Page Showcase for the week of July 31. Well done!
Trudy (a daughter of Christ)07/31/06
Wonderful, just wonderful. Everyone should read this. If you like to read one of mine I will post it tonite it is called Jesus will always love you.........similar theme, I wrote it a while ago. God bless Trudy
Phyllis Inniss 07/31/06
Great piece of writing. It stands out in a class of its own as its powerful images grip the reader. I'm so glad I read it.
Jamie glaser08/03/06
this was really interesting. i have never read anything from the devils point of view. it was quite powerful. God bless