The Official Writing Challenge
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04/13/06
Gentle story of letting go. Need a few paragraph breaks. You have a tender touch, keep it going.
04/14/06
Nicely written and with a few adjustments (spacing mainly), this would be an easy read with a gently strong message.
04/16/06
Yes, paragraph separation would make it a much easier read; however, it is a sweet story - but doesn't seem realistic to me. Keep up the good work...there is great potential.
Pat Guy  
04/17/06
Precious! I loved the ending with her new picture. Great story.
04/17/06
This is really sweet...but do angels really do that? I wonder if your main character could make her discoveries through God-directed circumstances, gentle nudgings...I like your gentle writing style.
04/17/06
Interesting idea and good little twist at the end with the addition of the new picture. As was already mentioned, it doesn't seem very realistic, but still a nice story. :)
04/17/06
Nice story. Your emotions are real but the characters aren't fleshed out enough to give the story the impact it needs. You have a very readable writing style - with some editing this will be a very good story.