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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Fulfillment (04/06/06)

TITLE: Fulfilled Life
By Becky Depp


As Rosa sat down next to the bed she cried and dabbed at her eyes. Why? I don’t get it, God! I cry to you…why…why is this happening? Rosa sat and waited. She was waiting for an answer, any answer. Just as Rosa looked up she saw, what appeared to be an Angel.
In the most soft and sweet voice the Angel said “I have come for your grandmother. She will be safe where we are going.” Rosa cried, “Why do you have to take her at all? I know she is old and her health is failing but why take her at all. I am a selfish grandchild. I don’t want to lose her.” The Angel, with such a heavy heart and a caring gaze said “There is something you need to see.” With that, The Angel took Rosa and they appeared in a room, in this room it had a pink mist to it, Rosa looked around and saw one picture. “That’s my grandmother the day she was born.” And then another picture showed up “That is when she graduated high school” and as each picture showed up Rosa got sadder and sadder…she knew what the Angel was trying to tell her but she didn’t want to let go. Finally, the last picture showed up… “That was taken yesterday…” Rosa said with a tear rolling down her cheek. “I am taking your grandmother because it’s her time to die. She has lived out her life…she has been fulfilled. It’s time for her to go home and with God.” With a tearful eye Rosa gave her head a nod and said “I understand.” Rosa sat in her chair and looked up. Her grandmother passed away peacefully in her sleep, Rosa looked down on her grandmother’s bed and found a picture, and it appeared to be her grandmother walking towards a light and the picture had something written on it and Rosa read it aloud “Blessed is she who has believed that what the Lord has said to her will be accomplished! Luke 1:45”

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Gini Branch04/13/06
Gentle story of letting go. Need a few paragraph breaks. You have a tender touch, keep it going.
Virginia Gorg04/14/06
Nicely written and with a few adjustments (spacing mainly), this would be an easy read with a gently strong message.
Marilyn Schnepp 04/16/06
Yes, paragraph separation would make it a much easier read; however, it is a sweet story - but doesn't seem realistic to me. Keep up the good work...there is great potential.
Pat Guy 04/17/06
Precious! I loved the ending with her new picture. Great story.
Jan Ackerson 04/17/06
This is really sweet...but do angels really do that? I wonder if your main character could make her discoveries through God-directed circumstances, gentle nudgings...I like your gentle writing style.
Debbie Sickler04/17/06
Interesting idea and good little twist at the end with the addition of the new picture. As was already mentioned, it doesn't seem very realistic, but still a nice story. :)
Jean Elizabeth 04/17/06
Nice story. Your emotions are real but the characters aren't fleshed out enough to give the story the impact it needs. You have a very readable writing style - with some editing this will be a very good story.