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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Lock (03/06/06)

TITLE: Open Doors, Closed Souls
By Jenny Thomas
03/08/06


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Open memories will combine,
Lingering deep within the mind.
Forever dwelling on the past
Giving that which could not surpass.

Reaching far into the sky,
Stretching farther and yet still not high,
Gaining the knowledge can only kill
What your mind has yet to feel.

Open doors entice you in,
Enter wisely for it could be the end.
Looking in on Closed Souls
As they spin beyond control.

Wanting peace and wanting freedom,
Waiting for both and yet neither,
Forever gone beyond their grasp,
As lights pure essence tumbles past.

Freedom lying beyond the reach
Of those whose souls sink in defeat.
Bound and gagged in this twilight hour,
Forever gone and spiraling higher

Waiting for the beast to awake
Darkness echoes this dreary place.
Waiting for the open door,
While your soul flies free once more

Wishing for the twilight hour,
Passing the silent nights' dreary power,
As the soul begins to fade
The doors will open with cries of pain.

Will the key fit in the lock?
To close these doors within the dark,
Freeing these souls that are bound
When the darkest hour comes around.


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Jan Ackerson 03/14/06
A worthy call to action! Work on rhyme and meter for an easier flow....great use of the topic word!
Jessica Schmit03/16/06
I agree with Jan's comments. This has a great message!
Kurt Youngdale03/16/06
The meter started out good but toward the end it got off a bit. The words didn't rythm but most of them were close enough. I thought the ending wasn't strong enough. There is something missing that I can't place my finger on. I did enjoy reading it though.