The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/06
Wonderful allegory--I was especially moved at the last third, after she ponders on the bench. You might consider leaving "my child" off several of God's utterances. Very well done.
03/13/06
A lot of people don't like the idea that to receive forgiveness from God, they must forgive. You've handled that truth very well in your story. Congratulations.
03/14/06
I THINK I understand why you kept the 'my child(s)' in, it makes sense, but it kinda distracts. Besides, think of the words you'd save and could add in!

The message you've shared is right on the mark!
Very well stated. Forgiveness is definetly the key.
Great job. Portrayed the struggle we have with heeding God's words, very well.
03/20/06
Congratulations on placing. Good job.
Trina,
This is truly beautiful! You have a gift & you're using it. I agree that this deserves an award. This blessed me!