The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/06
A very sweet story, and full of hope. A few edits for sentence structure will give it a smoother flow. Wonderful title--practically a whole lesson just in those few words!
03/14/06
A strong, realistic message!

But keep in mind that readers veiwing a flat computer screen will be less likely to scan the whole looking for meat and missing the treasures if the long paragraphs are squished together.

03/14/06
The writing style of this piece worked very well. Great Job!
03/16/06
Good messsage in this. Would read easier if spaced out more and grammar errors corrected. Instead of saying 'she got a Savior...' try 'she has ...' or 'she found her Savior' :)
03/16/06
I found this story to be a bit difficult to follow at time, but nonetheless you did a great job of letting us really get to know your main character.