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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Enter (02/27/06)

TITLE: Enter in and Stay
By Grace Sempa
03/05/06


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Enter in and Stay.

I always imagine the day
After I have walked the way
When my Lord will answer and say
Enter in my daughter and stay.

I have come from along way
Where darkness and shadows wait
Where the soul yearns without sleep
My spirit shut in darkness so deep.

I have stumbled along the way
Every time the Lord had His say
His eternal word driving me to pray
His Holy Spirit turning darkness, into day.

The times when I shut my ears and not listen
He waits patiently until Iíve known His mission
Telling me and filling me with His vision
Iím totally filled with gladness and pleasure.

When I was blind and lost
By the world and its lusts
His blood washed me in Love
Not as the world gave, but from above.

How can I not serve him? When his love
Burns within me in purity and holiness
How can I not love Him? My heart knows
That He first loved me.


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esther robinson03/08/06
Good writing.
Sandra Petersen 03/12/06
There is hope and a good message in these words. Some reworking would make this excellent. Your beginning stanza sets up a rhythm and rhyme scheme that doesn't follow through all the way. Perhaps, as someone once advised me, reading each stanza out loud would help you.Nevertheless, there were some phrasings that tugged at me: "How can I not serve him? When his love
Burns within me in purity and holiness"; "Where darkness and shadows wait
Where the soul yearns without sleep
My spirit shut in darkness so deep." Keep writing and experimenting with poetry. You have a voice the Lord wants to loose and His message to give. Thanks!