The Official Writing Challenge
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I really like the way you used the word 'Enter'in this poem, to describe the pathway to salvation. Well done.
I really liked the way you used the theme Enter in your poem. This was smooth flowing and easy to read. I hit a bump right here though with this sentence:

"But God so love was so great that He had a plan."

A little change here would keep the reader from halting and thinking about what this line really means. Otherwise I truly loved your poem all the way to end. Keep writing! Love ya bunches in Christ, littlelight
It was good, but the only thing was, the meter didn't feel like it flowed well to me. Different rhythm schemes are fine, and even good in poetry, but these didn't feel connected.

A good effort though :)>

what a clever way to "enter" the story of salvation