The Official Writing Challenge
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Protection is something that only the Almighty God can provide. A shiver went down my spine. Good writing.
03/03/06
An intriguing tale of "what might have been"! Kept me glued to the story throughout. Well written, but I keep wondering why you didn't take flight..run, tell somebody, scream, SOMETHING! However, well written.
Great job of producing suspence. I was in that van with the two girls. Great writing.
03/04/06
The red herring (threat of attack/death) was well presented, but I didn't feel scared enough. It felt gentle, in a sense...the more you scare me in the reality of the situation, the better that these types of threatening stories will be.

~Zac