The Official Writing Challenge
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I'd had loved to know more about the circumstances of your move to the friend's house. Take the middle section of this, and make a longer story, with more details for your hungry readers, please! It's best to avoid references to the Challenge in your entry, and your story would be much stronger if it began with your uprooting. Great start!
Short, sweet and to the point! Great job! I loved your take on "End", and yes, perhaps you will tell us more of your life story during the next few weeks, in bits & pieces, through your mastering of the art of Writing. Well done!
I can see great depth of insight in your writing. And you do it justice within the limits you have. It'll be a joy to read more as you progress in this complicated language!