The Official Writing Challenge
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You have some wonderful lines in this story. I especially like: “One boy, one brain, two boys, a half a brain, three boys, no brains.” I might have been tempted to work the dog into your last paragraph to make a better connection between story and application. But you did a great job.
Very well written, very much a page-turner (as they say about exciting books), and I loved the easy, down to earth flow of words; indeep a great piece, and I too loved the "one boy, one brain, etc.." I'll have to remember that! Great Job!
Congratulations Tim! Now you'll have to move up to where you belong...upper echelon! I'm so happy for you, because I loved your story, your style, your entry!
Tim, this is great! I laughed out loud. I'm so glad you finally entered the challenge. Not bad for your first try. I see you won 2nd place! Congratulations! You are so good at story telling. I agree that you should move up to Intermediate.
I am such a sucker for stories with kids, stories with dogs, and stories stirred with a Christian influence.

Tim, I absolutely LOVE your style. Great flow of words.

Great entry Tim! And a great message so well interweaved into this story. It's one I needed to read today. Thank you.