The Official Writing Challenge
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02/20/06
You have some wonderful lines in this story. I especially like: “One boy, one brain, two boys, a half a brain, three boys, no brains.” I might have been tempted to work the dog into your last paragraph to make a better connection between story and application. But you did a great job.
02/25/06
Very well written, very much a page-turner (as they say about exciting books), and I loved the easy, down to earth flow of words; indeep a great piece, and I too loved the "one boy, one brain, etc.." I'll have to remember that! Great Job!
02/27/06
Congratulations Tim! Now you'll have to move up to where you belong...upper echelon! I'm so happy for you, because I loved your story, your style, your entry!
Tim, this is great! I laughed out loud. I'm so glad you finally entered the challenge. Not bad for your first try. I see you won 2nd place! Congratulations! You are so good at story telling. I agree that you should move up to Intermediate.
03/03/06
I am such a sucker for stories with kids, stories with dogs, and stories stirred with a Christian influence.

Tim, I absolutely LOVE your style. Great flow of words.

03/30/06
Great entry Tim! And a great message so well interweaved into this story. It's one I needed to read today. Thank you.