The Official Writing Challenge
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I love the phrases "the uncaused causation" and "God desires that we enjoy eternity."

To focus your poem, take a look at your last few stanzas; you have quite a few mixed metaphors. Face like flint, foot on the gas, a track, and a race...that's a lot to throw at your reader. You might want to consider choosing one apt metaphor, and sustaining it throughout the whole poem.

Lots of depth of feeling here!
That caught my eye also, "uncaused causation" Good terms. I enjoyed the poem throughout. Listen to sis.Jan posts, she is very good pointing out helpful ideas. Very true, lots of depth and that's what like very much. Keep writing brother! Much teaching through inspiration is worthy of our acknowledgement. God bless ya, littlelight
Thanks Jan, Littlelight for your comments. A privilege to keep learning.