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02/13/06
Very touching story.
02/14/06
Beautiful description; a wonderful allegory! Good job!
I enjoyed your story very much. Although, I must say it was difficult at first to figure out if Mercy was someone who had received God's gift of salvation, or Jesus or ...? It was a beautifully written stroy and captivated me to the very end.
Oh, one more thing. I loved that the topic "break" was the main point in your story. You really used the topic well.
02/14/06
I love the symbolism! And the description of the wings was excellent; I thought I saw them right in front of me!
02/15/06
Very well written out. Interesting reading, would be for the youngsters as well. God bless ya, littlelight
02/16/06
Very nice! I've never attempted an allegory--they seem to me very difficult-- but you've done a remarkable job of it here.
02/16/06
I was drawn into your story at once! It was like sitting down, opening up a book and walking right into a fable. I could see everything vividly and I was caught up emotionally. What a beautiful way to show God's mercy and redemption towards our brokeness. Wonderful writing!
02/16/06
Wonderful writing, wonderful story. You spoke volumes with this one, it really touched me. Congratulations on a job well done. (And I don't think you should stay in the "Beginner" category, your writing is definitely at a more advanced level.)

This is a story you should pursue telling to an even wider audience. Your blessing is also your responsiblity - use your wings! :)
02/16/06
Very good story! I hope one day to write even half as good as that. As I read I wanted to know more about the little world you created with the shadow people, Mercy and the King. Great allegory and use of the topic.
02/17/06
A beautifully written tale, wonderful descriptions and detail.
02/18/06
This was very well written. wow! Creative, different, and meaningful. Very good! Best of luck with your writing!
02/19/06
Aside from the tiny mistake regarding... "whom she (KNEW) quite well"...I agree this is NOT Beginners stuff! It was definitely above average to the point of being an artistic Masterpiece! A "page-turner", as they say; couldn't wait to get to the next line! Great Job!
02/20/06
Awesome! Wonderful allegory...you have a lot of talent. Congratulations on a superb article!
02/20/06
Wonderfully written.
With a strong message too.May God bless your writings.
Your story of Crystal Wings was very enjoyable. This could easily be turned into a short story. Thanks for writing such a excellend piece.
Mercy and forgiveness, what a wonderful gift from the Lord? Your words are smooth and your imagination is clear. Nicely written. I enjoyed it.