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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Break (02/06/06)

TITLE: Give Me A Break (i)
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02/07/06


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GIVE ME A BREAK

"Break it up!" Jacob cried out. The fighting had grown worse and Daddy's drinking was getting to be a real problem. Jacob spent his time hiding oout in his room or at his friends house. It didnít matter - no one missed him and for awhile it was easy staying out of the line of fire, but Jacob was tired of hiding and playing it safe.

There was a sudden silence in the room and it made Jacob tremble in place. Daddy dropped his bottle of scotch and Mommy removed her hands from her face. Jacob could see that the bruise Daddy gave her last week still hadn't healed.

"What did you say?" Jacob's father's face twisted in anger, but Jacob stood his ground, silently praying for a miracle. "I said break it up and I mean it!" Jacob started to sob in deep heaving gasps.

"Honey, we're sorry." Jacob's mother embraced her son's trembling body. Jacob pulled away with a sudden jolt. "If you're truly sorry, prove it!"

Jacob's Dad fell prostrate on the living room floor. He sobbed quietly - his face buried in his hands. "I'm sorry, Son - I..." He couldn't hide his pain any longer and yelled out "God help me!"

The family decided to enter counseling and gradually they put their lives back together again.

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Two lessons can be learned from this story; (1). What you do affects not only your life, but that of your loved ones as well. (2). God's grace is sufficient for all our needs.


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Connie Husby02/13/06
I liked this story of GRACE. It was cut short and could have been longer I thought. Great story line though, we are so blessed to fall under God's never ending GRACE. You are going places my friend...great work! Thank you.
Virginia Gorg02/14/06
Nicely written, but seemed to end too abruptly. Engaging and held my attention.
Jessica Schmit02/14/06
I agree with the previous comments. I felt resolution came too suddenly for this family and escaped reality.This would be a really good story if you developed it a little more. You have a nice writing style, but make sure you get someone to proof read before submitting.
Nina Phillips02/15/06
I think your story was so really interesting, and effective that we would like to see more of it. Maybe have more insight. The abrupt ending, well--that to me is just how much it shocked everyone that Jacob suddenly spoke up from the heart. That really works most times. Still--as a interested, curious reader would like to read more of this. God bless ya, littlelight