The Official Writing Challenge
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02/13/06
I was drawn to you words in your poem, and found myself thinking about my own life. I really enjoyed the dramatic viewpoint on life and death and God's mercy. Thank you, you've inspired me.
02/13/06
There's some good, unusual vocabulary here.
This was beautiful. SO few words, conveyed such an powerful story. I loved the fresh words you used throughtout. Powerfully written!
02/15/06
I liked the analogy blended with poetic force. Very nice! God bless ya, littlelight
02/16/06
"My fist raised by the strength of a Body broken..."
Wow, just wow. This was powerful stuff, and I predict that you will not long be in Beginners.
02/16/06
I loved this especially: "There but for the grace of you, go I" - a neat twist on an old saying. It nailed your point. Good job.
02/17/06
The word choices are very strong. The message is outstanding. All in all a very powerful piece. Good luck with your writing!
02/17/06
Very poetic -some good images and well done comparison.
02/17/06
Very powerful and compelling! I agree - you won't be long in beginners. If I could make one suggestion, it would be to break up the paragraphs into a more linear form - turn it into free verse poetry. But don't change your choice of words at all. Amazing work!
02/18/06
Your descriptions are so vivid and your words so well-chosen, I felt that, instead of prose, I was reading poetry. I had to reread this because it almost seems symbolic of the plight of mankind in general and each individual in particular. One I could read again and again. Wow!
This is short, but I really liked it. I would like to see it written in prose/poetry form. very good.