The Official Writing Challenge
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02/08/06
God gives direction for those who know how to look.
I am blind.


A perfect description of our helplessness, followed by a good conclusion.
02/09/06
This is not my home. Then leave it he says.

These are really good points your made in your prose.
Enjoyed reading, there is some depth here. God bless ya, littlelight
02/11/06
My son loves to watch wrestling so I've seen it a million times. I really liked how you used wrestling as an analogy for fighting with sin. Nice job.
02/15/06
Good words, but you need to work on your stanzas if this is to remain poetry. Might I suggest that each stanza only contain one thought, and look for ways to isolate thots by give them isolated lines.
Also think about each word, and how you can color it better for the reader.

Like this:
Think
about each word
How
can I color each word
better
for my readers?

Keep writing!