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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Control (01/30/06)

TITLE: Seven secret pills
By esther robinson
02/01/06


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Seven secret pills?

“As a woman thinks in her heart, so is she.” Proverbs 23:7

Sarah a tall and lean woman with wrinkles pressed the calling bell and peeped through the window expecting to see the youthful face of her neighbour Sandra emerge from inside. Meanwhile, she adjusted the cotton candy like hairs that disobeyed her and thought, “While some people in their eighties still seem youthful, why should I at forty appear old and haggard?” and sighed looking at her physical frame.

To her surprise, a modestly dressed woman in whom time had also left the same ugly imprints called wrinkles, having a neat hair do, beholding thick spectacles that rested on her nose, with a cheer lit face, holding a child that clung to her shoulders came to open the door.

After formal greeting, Sarah sat down on the sofa. Introducing as, “I am Sharon’s great grandma” she told, “Sandra has gone to invite the pastor for Sharon’s birthday party. She will be back here at any moment”. Then like an energetic young woman she shot back with a pack of questions, “ By the way, for how many years have you lived here? What is your profession and that of your husband? Are you blessed with children? If so what are they doing?” one after another.

Sarah looked at her with wide-open eyes. Without answering her questions she threw back a set of questions at her, “What is your name? How old are you?” Where from have you come because I have not seen you here before?”


She smiled and said, “My name is Mrs. Control. Instead of asking, “How old are you?” I would have appreciated your thoughtfulness if you had asked, “How many years have you lived?” It is quite natural and normal for the skin to show symptoms of aging, but it is totally a different story when a person truly “gets old.”

It is just a matter of our attitude. The Bible says, “As (a man) thinketh in his heart, so is he” (Proverbs 23:7 KJV). You don’t have to become old unless you wish to be one.”

“Has my grandma started giving her lecture to you also?” thus questioning in entered Sandra. “I am really impressed by her harangue” replied Sarah. “Did she tell you about the seven tablets?” Granny smiled and patting her daughter said, “Honey! I have not yet started that subject. Now that I have some other matter to attend on, you may cut short my tale and tell her my mystery and I’ll explain in detail when time permits me” so saying granny placed Sharon on a push bike and bid adieu promising to meet Sarah later.

Eagerly Sarah asked, “What are those seven tablets?” Sandra took a deep breath and then said, “My grandma looks very young at heart isn’t it? From a very young age, she has controlled her mind to take seven tablets every day.

They are:

1. Learning new things
2. Loving those around you.
3. Laughing whenever possible.
4. Laboring to make others joyful
5. Leaving behind past emotional luggage
6. Longing for better things and above all
7. Leaning on the Lord (Jesus Christ)

Everyone has nick named her Mrs. Control. She is still a person eighteen at heart although her physical frame does not approve of the same.”

Following a chit-chat that continued for a couple of minutes, Sarah got up like a young girl and left with this thought in mind, “Mrs. Control? So is she…..I will go and challenge the cares and concerns of this life by controlling my mind using the seven secret pills.”


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Nina Phillips02/07/06
I liked the seven secret pills. I found it hard to digest this story as I was reading, and went back to read it again. The charactors seemed to need more clarification. It was a little bit confusing at the start. Still a nice story though. Little more on the developement and separation of the charactors. God bless ya, littlelight
Birdie Courtright02/08/06
I liked your ending. There was a little confusion for me too, so separating the dialogue and more definition of the characters speaking, thinking and telling would solve that. Very creative work! I enjoyed grandma's philosophy!
Phyllis Inniss 02/08/06
I too had a llittle problem following through, but I like the seven pills.
Jan Ackerson 02/08/06
I like your 7 points--you might want to use them to write this in the form of a devotional.

Watch for run-on sentences and punctuation errors. And a final suggestion: you have 3 characters, all with names beginning with "S". It might be easier to keep track of who's who if their names were more different.

I really liked the spunk of Mrs. Control.