The Official Writing Challenge
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Good content.:) I would separate dialogue into separate paragraphs if it changes persons. I think this flowed well and came to a nice ending. Keep writing!!
What a great, honest piece that many can relate to. Great catchy title. Well written. Keep writing,you have what it takes.
God bless,
Nancy Moyle
I liked your story. It can really relate to women today, who are many times about control. You are very fortunate to have a husband give and take relationship. The Bible says for the saints to SUBMIT ourselves to one another. That goes for the brothers or menfolk as well. So that the burden of submission is not entirely upon the wife. However, if this works for you..and helps others--is great. I thought your story was well written out. Only needs a little polishing. Keep writing! God bless ya, littlelight
Love your third-to-the-last paragraph; in that one small paragraph you really captured her personality.
Your message is speaking to me even now. Thank you for the reminder, because it's an area where I struggle.