The Official Writing Challenge
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02/06/06
This is a really touching story! It needed to be written. I would suggest double spacing the paragraphs for easier reading. Some spelling fixes and maybe break up some of the sentences and this will be even better.:)
02/06/06
This was a great story. Truly touching. Though that space between paragraphs will make this alot easier for us to read. A little polishing, and then really awesome story. God Bless you, littlelight
What a great story, and a tender legacy. Having grown up in San Diego, I am well aware of the treacherous rocks along Point Loma. What a heroic man!
02/08/06
This is an exciting story! There are some comma usage problems, and I think you meant "role" model. This is a touching tribute to your grandfather.
This is a lovely story and a touching tribute to Grandpa Bob. The sentance structure needs a little polishing in places , for example the sentance 'Grandpa Bob was wary...' feels a little awkward which halts the flow of this exciting re-telling. Sweet tribute to a strong man. God bless.