The Official Writing Challenge
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01/30/06
Enjoyed reading through your story, some editing is in order for polishing a bit. Liked the voice of the Lord speaking here. Good thoughts for a listener at the end. Thank you for sharing..Keep writing! littlelight
01/30/06
You only refer to Mary once, the rest is her thoughts...this would be easier to follow if written more like a story. Nice job with the reassuring words of the Father.
01/31/06
I especially enjoyed the idea of letting God help you redecorate! What a lovely idea. Clean of the grammar and puctutation a bit and this is quite a nice story.
02/07/06
What a neat concept ... space jam ... and the way you linked the space in your mind and the space out there was good.

I especially liked the sentence: "My space age is as old as creation." Profound.

Glad to have you around in FaithWriters, Grace. You're off to a good start.