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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Start (01/16/06)

TITLE: If Only We Knew
By Larry Elliott


“Start! Come on. Please?”


“God, you know how much I need this job. I just can’t be late for the interview.”


“Please, pleeease. I’ll fill you with premium I promise.” Susie gently patted the dashboard.


“Uhh.” She banged her fist on the steering wheel then folded her arms across it, lowered her head and wept.

“Oh, God why? Why today?” she cried.

She raised her head and blew a straggle of hair from her face.

Susie would surely faint if she could see the misshapen leathery creature perched on her vehicle, knotty claw-like fingers disappearing through the hood and shorting out the battery.

This same creature would surely faint if it had seen the mountainous figure appear behind it, golden sword at his side, white feathered wings ready for flight.

“It isn’t fair.’ She sniffed.

The creature drooled and coughed wet laughter.

In a short time the winged avenger smiled and said, “That is enough.”

“Wha…?” the demon howled and twisted its wrinkled neck completely backward.

The angel grabbed it in one mighty hand and squeezed until the demon popped into a black greasy puff of nothingness.

“Try it now.” The angel breathed across Susie’s ear.

Susie thought she would give it one more go, though the battery was surely drained by now. This time the engine exploded to life with a bang then settled into a smooth idle. Her jaw dropped in awe.

“Oh, thank you Lord.”

The angel smiled again then rocketed skyward.

Susie began to pull out of the driveway when she heard, “Mom, stop.”

Katlin sprinted up beside the driver door as Susie rolled down the window.

“Trish called. She’s sick and her mom can’t take me to school and I’ve already missed the bus.”

“I…” Susie almost said she did not have time this morning, but caught herself.

A single mother to a twelve- going on twenty- year old was not easy. She knew it was no picnic for Katlin, either, since her father left.

With a sigh Susie surrendered to missing the interview. “Hop in.”

“Thanks mom. I love you.” Katlin gently kissed her mother’s cheek as she buckled up.

Susie grinned as serenity consumed her despair.

“Something better is waiting for you.” This thought entered Susie’s mind so boldly she thought for a second she had heard it audibly.

“I hope so.” She answered out loud.

“You know I do, mom.”

Puzzled briefly, Susie realized what she had just said and hugged her daughter. “Yes I do know for a fact. And I love you, too sweetie- so very much.”

“I hope so.” Katlin mimicked and they laughed.

Soon into their journey traffic stopped still. “Oh well, no reason to be in a rush now.” Susie thought.

Katlin could see flashes of blue and red bouncing off snow swaddled trees.

“Must be a wreck.” She said to her mother.

Susie cautiously stepped out onto the wet pavement.

“Dear God, I pray for the safety of anyone involved.” She prayed out loud.

A man standing beside the car ahead noticed this and approached her.

“Hello. I’m John Milner, pastor of Faith Fellowship church on Second Street.” He extended his hand which Susie shook firmly.

“Nice to meet you, I’m Susie. My daughter and I have actually talked about visiting sometime.”

“I hope you will.” He smiled then nodded toward the mishap. “There was an accident up ahead- four cars and a school bus. Nothing too serious, but they are taking two kids to the clinic- just routine. A few seconds earlier and we would have been right in the middle of it. Isn’t it amazing how things work out sometimes?”

“Yes, isn’t it?” Susie answered. “But this will probably cost me a job. I’m supposed to be at an interview in…,” she checked her watch, “ten minutes.”

“Well, I don’t know what you’re applying for, but we’ve been praying for a full time church secretary. The salary isn’t extensive, but negotiable. And we have a decent health plan. That counts for quite a bit nowadays.”

“Yes it does.” Susie said, dumbfounded. “Thank you. I am definitely interested.”

“Good. Give me a call or just stop by the church later. Isn’t it amazing how the Lord answers our prayers sometimes?” Rev. Miller smiled again as he handed Susie his card.

“Yes it is.”

Katlin, who had been standing behind her mother shouted, “Amen!”

“Amen.” Susie and the pastor said in unison then laughed.

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Grace Sempa01/23/06
I join in too with a big loud AMEN.How just like God to make Devine appointments for us, we are blessed!
Marilyn Schnepp 01/24/06
NOW we know why the angel didn't step in sooner, right? So many things we don't know the answers to - but one day we'll know all the "Why's"...nice story...and well written.
Jan Ackerson 01/24/06
The section with the demon and the angel is exceptionally well-written. The only thing I question is the job offer; most churches hesitate to hire a person without knowing their faith status. The "coincidence" of avoiding the accident is perhaps enough? You also wrote the main character's internal voice very well--thanks for this story!
Dara Sorensen01/26/06
I like the description of the angel and demon--you never know how many things like that happen on a day to day basis.

There did seem to be a lot going on especially near the end but the story was very interesting. Nice perspective on the influence of angels and demons!
Jessica Schmit01/30/06
Larry, time to move up a level (or two!). I've sen your name across quite a few wins in the past few weeks. Great job! But time to move up!