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As one who knows, I can say that this is a very accurate representation of the kinds of feelings one goes through after a devastating event. Good job. I don't think you needed to capitalize "IT" throughout--it was slightly distracting. Thank you for the hope at the end. Well done.
You did a good job getting into the bitterness, but moved toward hope. I liked how you didn't reveal it all at once what had happened.
I'm surprised that more people have not commented on this article! You wrote with great understanding how someone would be attempting to piece her life back together after a major incident. I agree that the reader does not need to know what caused this, but simply needs to be reminded of God's faithfulness and trustworthiness. Watch the verb tenses to be sure they agree throughout (In one paragraph you switched from 'has been stolen' to 'had been stolen').Try not to switch to 'we' (keep all of it in Cady's POV) as in "...and how we must have an awareness of our sinfulness. Most important, though, was the forgiveness we receive through Jesus Christ." Thank you for sharing this article!