The Official Writing Challenge
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01/24/06
A well-written cautionary tale! Twice you slipped into second person ("you")--try to avoid that. Otherwise, a very worthy story, with vivid word pictures.
01/26/06
Good story! Vivid word choice. Wish everyone would get the truths shared here. Thanks for writing about it.