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01/24/06
A thought-provoking little slice-of-life; I hope Horace thinks about it, too. I think you meant "buffet", not "buffett", and "Bible" should be capitalized. I'd be interested in reading an expansion of this story, with Horace unable to forget the man in the cafe.
01/26/06
I agree with the previous comment..you have a great start to a really good story and maybe could take it further. You also might want to check your punctuation around dialogue some. Your character was intriguing and made me want to know him more.:)