The Official Writing Challenge
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Very gripping
Excellent, very evocative.
01/24/06
Well-written and powerful! The word "he" in the first sentence begs to be a noun, as otherwise the reader's eyes try to associate it with the given noun, "mother." That's a minor quibble, however--this is a wonderful story of redemption.
01/26/06
I liked this! Her stress and anxiety was vivid. The ending was clear and tied it all together. :)
01/27/06
A powerful entry - a sad story that happens all too often. Glad to see a hopeful ending.
Well written. Good description of her inner struggle. I also appreciated the ending - hope in God's promise of being a new creation. Here's to ALL things new... Thanks.
01/28/06
Very nice writing! I agree, that first 'he' threw me, till I reread it a couple of times. Good job!
01/28/06
I love this piece! Very very well written! Thanks so much for sharing this.

Our best writing is when we pull from the depth of our emotions.
01/29/06
Yes! Very good writing! Carried my emotions all the way! Great job!