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01/24/06
I really like the realistic characters you created here, and the mother's handling of the situation. A few edits for comma usage and consistent tense will make this a superb entry.
01/26/06
Well I was right there with them! You described the scene very well and I think the mom was very realistic as well! Made me happy I live in Fla and no more ice!!Brrr...
01/27/06
Ditto to Jan's comments. The characters read real and your descriptions of the icy surroundings worked very well!
01/27/06
Ice is the worst to drive in! Well done -and nice dialog with the kids :)
I identified with this one. Made me shiver. I have never had to flee from an ice storm. But, this past hurricane season, I was faced with two hurricanes. In the aftermath of Katrina, I found myself directing a hurricane relief shelter. Then when Rita targeted my hometown, I found myself fleeing. Thanks for them memories! Good job!
01/28/06
A well written, fast paced, story with realistic characterization and a strong sense of place. I particularly like the mum giving thanks and allying the kids rears that they were being punished. Yeggy

01/29/06
Wow! I've never experienced anything like this! You took us right along with you! Good job!