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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Start (01/16/06)

TITLE: First Steps
By Jesus Puppy
01/17/06


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Once upon a time, in the beginning, a new beginning, from the very start, as the day began, night was over and the dawn rolled in, as he started out toward the door. Every step was new, a rebirth of life, born again with every breath, new strength as each moment opened for the first time.

It was a new day, he was out for his first steps, seeing the world for the first time, as his eyes opened to a grand new vision. Life, the start of it all, moment to moment in a waking dream, he viewed the world in truth for the first time.

Hearing the first birds chirping with the sunrise, feeling the chill of morning, the quiet day began, and he was determined to make a fresh start of it all. To begin, breakfast, then off for his first walk of the day. What a good start he had, with endless possibilities that still lay ahead, no turning back as this was the start of something big...........

At just that moment, a new young mother, picked up her toddling son, shouting joyfully as he made his first steps.


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Jan Ackerson 01/23/06
Very cute, you really captured this little fellow's first steps. I'm not sure that you needed all the phrases with the same meaning in your first sentence. I can just see this toddler on his unsteady feet!
Cassie Memmer01/23/06
Oh this is cute! LOL! I could just see the little guy too. There had to be a mischievious sparkle in his eye. In yours too! And every moment is brand new for those little ones, each and everyone is a new start. I enjoyed this!
Jesus Puppy 01/24/06
Sorry folks this was suppose to be a stupid entery... with nothing but "Starters"... then I saw it would never end and made it a childs steps.
Alexandra Wilkin01/25/06
This captured the little boys first steps beautifully, but I agree that the first sentance needs tightening up. Keep writing and God bless.
Sandra Petersen 01/28/06
A little reworking of the first paragraph, removing a few commas, and this would be excellent.
I think it is alright to leave the identity of the 'walker' til the last. The last sentence was a delightful surprise regardless of how you intended the piece to turn out.
I wonder if the young mother realized what frustration she caused her little adventurer. Far from being a 'stupid entry', you touched me with the remembrances of my own children when they were toddlers.