The Official Writing Challenge
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Sounds like fun and I like the way you wrote this. I don't know if it should have any spaces or not (maybe just a space between each line for visual effect?)and I think the conversation could use quotes - but I really enjoyed this glimpse, and I had fun too!
A delightful glimpse into a home where mum can bow her head in humble praise that her kids love Him. Just watch out for the shift from present to past tense: A snowball did fly!/
The dog jumped to catch it/
But while in transit/
The cat decided to move.
A fun picture of a faithful family. It would flow more easily if you work on meter--having the same number of accented and unaccented syllables in each line. Rhyme scheme is very good, and lots of clever word choices here. Thanks for this lovely poem!
A wonderful picture of a family doing what families do best :)
Nice free verse. I could hear the hubbub! :)
Yes ... a million directions at once! Each going a hundred miles per hour! Sounds like home to me!