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Poignant story!
01/16/06
Oh, how sad! I have to believe that in Chapter Two, she turns back to God. Well-written.
absolutely gripping. Wonderful writing...sad story...I hope it has a happy ending later down the road. With God all things are possible.
01/17/06
So incredibly tragic! I could feel McKenna's pain clearly. This could develop into a longer story, maybe even into a novel.
01/17/06
Well written and so sad! Emotions were delivered true to life. I wanted a happier ending but hopefully it will be continued later. Great title too. I can see you put much thought and work into this writing.
01/20/06
Interesting, but I'm unsure if she is pregnant now or not. Your sentence is confusing and could be read that they bought the house when she was pregnant, or she is pregnant now. The next chapter (if there is one) could go several ways. Nicely written.