The Official Writing Challenge
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02/14/05
Lovely writing but the welcome mat part threw me off.
Great story. I remember those days of kids and chaos and my husband would get upset if I told him someone "dropped in" wondering what the house looked like! I always, said, "they came to see me, not the house".

I like the analogy with the welcome mat at the end but it needed a little more rephrasing to let it tie in as an ending. Actually, I think that is a whole new story!
02/17/05
well if you like dirty welcome mats...you'll love mine! but I think it's more "dark" because of the humidity and mold! ha-ha!
02/20/05
I can emphathize with you. I'm just not a housekeeper! About the welcome mat, i agree that is a separate story. Perhaps you can tell it to us one day!