The Official Writing Challenge
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01/16/06
Good object lesson! My only suggestion would be to set the Scripture quotations in italics, to set them apart from your narrative. Beautiful job of setting up the parallels.
01/16/06

Very nicely done.
01/18/06
Very good analogy. Loved this piece! Good job.
01/19/06
Excellent use of a personal example to explain an important Christian concept.
01/20/06
Very well done except for the "I swooped me up" boo boo...and I loved the story! The scripture quotations fit in so well and the opposites of "home" and "lost" were brilliant! Nicely done and God Bless.
01/22/06
Yes, I agree this is really a wonderful story and analogy. Thoroughly enjoyed it! Thank you for sharing in such a great way. God bless ya, littlelight