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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Escape (01/02/06)

TITLE: To Follow?
By James Baggs
01/09/06


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Space closing in on me.
Less room.
It will be OK.
I guess it will be fine.
Canít move around as much.
Wish there was a way out Ė to do more.
Help.
help, please.
.
.
Wait, thereís a place to go.
Should I follow?
I donít know that place.
Maybe I should just stay.
Canít move around as much, but it will be OK.
No, I should go. I will go.
No, no itís too tight to go.
I will stay. It will be OK.
.
.
Thereís that place. Maybe itís not too tight.
Yes, it can be done.
Yes, I can go.
YES, I will go.
NOW!
.
.
Oh no, this new place is tight.
I donít know if I can make it.
Should I go back? It would be OK.
No, I will keep going.
Itís getting tighter now. Itís beginning to hurt.
help
Help
HELP.
Still getting tighter.
Canít go back now.
Need to move forward.
.
.
Itís still getting tighter. Need to move faster. Move. Push. Pull. Faster. Faster. Push. Pull. Squeezzze. FASTER-FASTER. HELP PLEASE! PUSH-PULL. BREAKING FREE. OUT. GOT TO RUN. GO LEFT. GO RIGHT. NOT SURE WHERE I AM. MOVE. HELP. FASTER. QUICK JUMP. RUN. LEFT-LEFT-RIGHT-UP-DOWN-JUMP-FASTER-HELP-UP-UP-UP-JUMP!!!!! ESCAPED!
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.
Escaped.
Out at last.
Thank You.
Great place.
Lots of room.
What excitement that was.
WHAT JOY
Never felt happier.
Glad I followed.
Thank YOU!


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Allison Millward01/11/06
You sure captured my attention. My mind kept trying to figure out what these places were..I have been left hanging in the "why", and the "where".
Quite unusual but I enjoyed it.
Sandra Petersen 01/12/06
I think I understand what the place was? Were you talking about the prison we are in before we come to follow Jesus and how painful the experience can be of leaving the old man behind and ending up in the Christian liberty to which Paul alludes? Very original! Leaves lots of room for meditation. Thanks for sharing.
Jan Ackerson 01/13/06
I'm thinking that this is depicting the birth process, but I could be way off. Hope you'll tell us, now that judging is over!
Marilyn Schnepp 01/15/06
I also thought of birth process until the last line or so; then realized it had to be something else. Very Interesting...but still stymied and puzzled. It was unique, but I kept reading - which means you kept the readers interest to the end. Thank you for sharing.