The Official Writing Challenge
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01/11/06
I thought you started out really well..using the car example and baggage but then the ending needed to be tightened up somewhat. I liked the direction you were going and the way you explained life and situations we find ourselves in. With a little revision at the ending, this would be a very good piece!:)
01/12/06
"Even God repented that he made man"; Wow, I never gave that a thought until you brought it up in this article! What a great way to explain marriage! Taking a long trip with baggage galore! I really liked your thoughts = and gave me so much to think about. Nicely done. God Bless!
01/14/06
You did a great job on your first entry! Congratulations. I love the road trip analogy. I think you could expand this even more, and develop the drama before you come to your point. I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff as this quarter progresses.